March 15, 2010
Emerging From My Cave
Sort of disappeared there, didn’t I? Sorry about that. But in my absence I managed to rework the ending of Blood and Bone and finish all the major revisions. All I have to do now is some minor tweaking. Yay!
And because I’m particularily pleased with the results, here’s an a short excerpt:
The sucking slop of footsteps in wet mud rose from the black. The hair on the back of her neck bristled, and a chill tickled along her spine.
Was it Hudson coming back to finish with her? Tic?
What was she doing standing around out here anyway? A woman alone, late at night on a deserted country road during a thunderstorm? The scene had slasher flick written all over it.
She started for the driver side door, but a low moan rose up from the darkness.
Had to be the wind. Still, she picked up her pace.
The moan came again, louder this time. Shayne stopped and turned. A dark, hunched figure staggered toward her.
“Christ.” She gripped the door handle and yanked open the door.
The stooped outline lurched in front of her single headlight, and the glare illuminated the ugliest Hawaiian shirt she’d ever seen.
Des Anderson.
Relief swamped her like a tidal wave, turning her muscles soft for the second time in one night. The feeling, however, was short lived. He may not have been the homicidal maniac she’d imagined, but the jerk had scared the life out of her. And all because he was staggering drunk. Even from this distance, the smell of beer was nearly over powering.
As he pitched forward, the light cast a ghostly pallor over his face. Dark smudges beneath his left eye, along his lip and circling the edges of each nostril stood out from the stark whiteness of his skin.
Blood.
He wasn’t just drunk, he was hurt.
“What happened to you?” she asked.
Her question stopped him short. He tilted his head the way Maura’s terrier did when asked if he wanted a cookie.
Des opened his mouth, but no sound came. Instead, he sank to his knees and fell forward, sprawling face first on the gravel at her feet.
“You have got to be kidding.”
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Sounds great, Dawn. Best of luck with the minor tweaks!
March 15th, 2010 at 4:44 pmThanks,Jerri! I’m glad you liked it.
March 17th, 2010 at 2:10 pmI’ve been in a bit of a cave myself. I’m still blogging, but I’ve barely visited any other blogs because I’m working on the WIP. Glad to hear you’ve finished B&B. Look forward to reading the rest!
March 17th, 2010 at 3:22 pmLove that excerpt! You do a terrific job with line-by-line tension. Looking forward to reading the rest of B&B.
March 17th, 2010 at 6:43 pm